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The correct answer is: 'Although e-commerce is a modern phenomenon, it has become a valuable business tool.' (One sentence only, because sentences starting with 'Although' always have 2 parts, separated by a comma.)

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The correct answer is: 'I.T. is very common in business, and it is very useful.' (The original sentences are too short for academic writing, and there is no linking.)

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The original sentence was: 'Computer science is the science of doing things with computers.' (Too obvious. This definition does not help a reader to understand what computer science is. Computer science is a complicated subject, and you need to write an extended definition to define it adequately; e.g. 'Computer science involves the design, assembly, programming and use of computers.')

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The original sentence was: 'Zoology is the science of managing a zoo.' (Wrong meaning: zoology is the category of biology dealing with animals.)

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The correct answer is: 'Although HKPU is in a convenient location, however the air pollution here is quite bad.' (Don't use 'however' and 'although' in the same sentence. In general, only use one conjunction for contrast such as 'however', 'but' and 'whereas', in one sentence.)

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The correct answer is: 'Engineering courses are more popular as than IT courses.' (After the comparative adjective use 'than'. Only use 'as' if something is 'the same as'.)

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The correct answer is: 'The most busy busiest students here are the third-year students.' (Adjectives of 2 syllables that end in 'y' usually change their ending to 'ier' or   'iest'. Click here for more details about comparatives and superlatives.)

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The correct answer is: 'There are a number of similarity similarities between computing and business courses.' (After 'a number of' use a plural noun.)

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The correct answer is: 'While Taiwan has a strong hardware industry, Hong Kong haven’t. hasn’t.' or '..., Hong Kong doesn't.' (Always be careful of subject-verb agreement. Hong Kong is one thing, so use 'hasn't' or doesn't, not 'haven't'. 'Hasn't' is a more obvious contrast to 'has', and 'doesn't' is also possible because 'doesn't' is the negative auxiliary verb for the third person singular in the present simple tense.)

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The correct answer is: 'E-mail is the most popular type of program on the Internet. (It’s a type of program. Eudora and Outlook are e-mail programs. Definitions must be accurate.)

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The correct answer is: 'Plagiarism is defined as copying from text books without referencing and either quoting, summarising or paraphrasing.' (The original sentence is not detailed enough: Copying from text books is acceptable if the copied text is shown as a quote and has some referencing; e.g the author's family name, date of publication and page number. For more information on quoting, click here.)

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The correct answer is: 'Referencing correctly will make your assessment grades more higher.' ('High' is a one-syllable adjective, so change the ending rather than adding 'more'. Click here for more details about comparatives and superlatives.)

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The original sentence was 'Teachers should know that students can be categorised as either male or female.' (Teachers already know this. Also, there are more helpful categorisations, such as categorising students by their learning style.)

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The original sentence was grammatically correct, 'E-business can be defined as the process of doing business electronically.' (However, this definition is not very helpful to a reader who does not know what e-commerce is. A more extended definition would be more helpful; e.g. 'E-business can be defined as the process of enabling business transactions such as ordering over the Internet.')

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The correct answer is: 'Academic writing is defined as writing which is formal…' (To give more information about a noun such as 'writing', you can use a relative clause. Relative clauses start with a relative pronoun such as 'which', then a verb; e.g 'is', then the rest of the clause.)

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The correct answer is: 'HK students’ English language ability always often correlates with their academic ability.' (Don't use 'always' to emphasise the frequency of an action in academic writing. Use a more accurate adverb of frequency, such as 'frequently' or 'often'. 'Correlates' means something is at the same level and increases or decreases at the same time. Therefore if a student is getting high marks in English, they are probably getting high marks in other academic subjects as well.)

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The correct sentence is 'Hong Kong students sometimes have better English than Mainlanders.' (This sentence contains many of the mistakes mentioned above.)

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